Improving Opening Scene

After getting my work graded by all of the media teachers at my sixth form I decided I wanted to improve my opening scene as I was close to getting the grade I wanted to achieve. I changed my opening scene by changing the font to something more post apocalyptic to match the genre better, I was suggested to try my film title font however I felt like this would take away the effect I wanted to create with having a bold title at the end, therefore I found another font similar to the film title on http://www.dafont.com/ , in which case I used the "28 Days Later" font where I screenshot the font and edited it on Photoshop by cropping the screenshot, moving the words to the place I wanted them and inverted the screenshot so that it would have a black background and white text to work well with my black stops for my credits. Another thing I did was edited the majority of my opening scene on Premiere Pro to create a more black and white kind of look to my opening scene, it is not fully black and white as some tones such as the red to the apple in my opening scene are shown, so it is more foggy and dusty looking to make it look very old and tiring to match the environment. So the way I did this was by taking away the majority of the contrast and by changing the brightness to be quite low to get the effect I wanted. I believe that these two specific changes have improved my opening scene majorly due to the fact that the effect of the colour in my opening scene matches the genre and reminds me of The Road as the film is very dull and gray scale. The font I am very happy that I changed as I realised after the change it made a dramatic difference in my opinion. Below are screenshots of the changes that I have made shown clearly, the left images are of my draft opening scene and the right shows the change.

On the image above you can see exactly what changes I made on Premiere Pro to create the dark gloomy look I wanted

Evaluation Four

Evaluation four from ewelina stefaniak

Evaluation Three

Evaluation Two

Evaluation One

Forsaken Draft #1

A New Idea

Throughout editing my post apocalyptic opening scene I started to ask for feedback from my teacher's, family and friends to spot anything that I could add onto my opening scene before it had to be finished. I did get many people asking me what was happening a lot of the time and they did admit they would not know that my opening scene is in the post apocalyptic environment. Therefore what I decided to do eventually was add a voiceover to explain the story and to help people understand what they were watching. I recorded the voiceover on my iPhone 5s and from watching my preliminary task recently I learned from my mistake that I should not record my voiceover too close to the person's mouth as it sounds too loud, you can hear the person breathe and you can hear them almost spit into the microphone. I asked one of my media teachers if they would be able to do my voice over for me as I knew that he would take this seriously, I asked him to try to sound very tired and as if he had not ate or drank for at least a week to get the effect I wanted, so he ended up pressing his throat a little to try to get a deep and dark voice. I gave him a short script consisting of him saying , "Day twenty-three, still can't find any food, or water, each day gets harder, but I know, we can make it through, this disaster", I asked him to take breaks throughout this so that it would make him sound like he had no energy or hope so that the audience would connect with my opening scene more and understand it better. Whilst editing after recording this I cut down the recording to where the pauses were and placed them on each cut before my credits so that it matched with my music and the edits.